John says ...
Christy has clearly written this as the first part of an exciting longer story.
The challenge authors face when they split a story in this way, is to get the readers so interested they will be desperate to read the next part when it is written and published.
The traditional way to do this is by leaving readers with a strong feeling of suspense at the end of each part. Suspense is that sense of excitement a story or film can create in you, when you feel you just have to find out what is going to happen next.
A suspenseful ending to a part of a story - or an episode of a television drama - is often called a 'cliffhanger'. This is because in the early days of cinema, serial adventures frequently left characters sometimes hanging off a cliff by their finger tips.
Many of Charles Dickens' classic novels were first published in instalments in magazines, with each instalment having its own cliffhanger.
These days a cliffhanger usually leaves a character in a dangerous situation, or with an extremely difficult decision to make.
Christy has successfully created both danger for James and a difficult decision for Becky.
But maybe the cliffhanger could be stronger, with the danger made even more scary, and Becky's decision made even more uncertain and urgent ...