Apologies to Sam for reworking his story in what might seem like a fairly radical way.
But has it much really changed? The events are exactly the same: Chris tricks a girl into believing she can be a model; he tries to rob her when she won't pay a 'fee'; Chris is arrested as we discover she is, in fact, a policewoman.
But a story told from a fresh perspective - or point of view - can feel quite different. There's no right way to tell a story - you have to choose the approach that fits best with what you are trying to achieve.
I've already described some of the points of view you can use, but you can also switch perspective during a story. In Caught In A Trap we could see the beginning, say, from Chris's point of view, as in my version of the story. The second half could then be told by the policewoman, as in the original.
And remember, sometimes villains make more interesting characters. In an even longer version of the story, it would be possible to go even further into Chris's past and personality, by describing his thoughts and memories.
Hopefully, seeing the story from his point of view means it's easier to believe in the surprise ending - but seeing the story from his perspective doesn't have to mean we want him to escape justice.Topics: Fiction Mathematics Narrative Mode Policewoman